Bob Thanks, keens seems a good word potentially carrying two meanings in
this context. Christina suggests it might be cliché but I cant say I have
noticed it that much myself but I may be wrong. Don't you think there is
mileage in zooming out from the microcosmic to the macrocosmic sometimes?
Gives us a sense of perspective to shift focus now and again. Don't you
think?
Arthur
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From: "Bob Cooper" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Friday, January 03, 2003 10:15 PM
Subject: Re: New sub: constitutional


> Hi arthur,
> Brrrr! You've caught the total chill of a Pennine midwinter's day here!
> I'm not sure why but I'm not too keen on the line:
> "the wind keens   from the clouded scarps"
> I think it may be I'm jolted to look up and look differently at the things
> you mention. Everything else seems so small, so particular, and - in the
> last line - so hidden. But this line comes at me with too much force.
> Otherwise I love how its playing with images and words. (And, again,
there's
> a magic in the last line!)
> Bob
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> >From: arthur seeley <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: New sub: constitutional
> >Date: Thu, 2 Jan 2003 08:51:37 -0000
> >
> >magpies hack    the corpse of Christmas
> >
> >strip the racked cage    a few flakes swirl
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> >by the post office    a child tears open sweets
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> >the old school    melts into lorries
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> >the wind keens   from the clouded scarps
> >
> >patient thin fingers    prise the earth open
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