envelope of stone - I've not seen it I can picture something
perimeter'd with weary poppy feet - simly "yes!"
have to confess I've not yet looked up who is Copland Smith
promoted pawn - yes
footie in street - powerful 'cos not many "poets" mention that daily Beckam
factor
musty chequred zone - almost lost on me at moment - I can do things with it
but any hints?
spent as cartridges - fabulous
the whole poem is dramatically understaed to me which gives it power, the
everydayness of footie and the otherworldiess of that Mons Angel I have
heard something about
cheers
tony
ps you could send it to "stopwar.org.uk" which is the coalition against the
war site building for I guess and hope a (dramatic) million in London this
Saturday - see you all there
----- Original Message -----
From: "Philip Burton" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Sunday, February 09, 2003 7:33 AM
Subject: new submission: The Unknown Soldier
The Unknown Soldier
for Copland Smith
Something dramatic ought to happen here
at this fallen envelope of stone
perimeter'd with weary poppy feet -
The Angel of Mons perhaps appear.
Or the man himself, promoted pawn
of the sacrifice, dying to be the decent-
minded youth who'd murder a beer
and, shot of this musty chequered zone,
enjoy an hour of footie in the street.
And so we shuffle blankly out
spent as cartridges. Big Ben bound
we steel ourselves for one more bout
of seeing London in the round -
its peace campaign on the roundabout.
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