Well I guess there's not a reference to Arthur Conan Doyle here. A couple of
suggestions Arthur (no pun intended): S1 - do you need to tell us about the
device you are using? S4 - "Wayfarers All" to "all Wayfarers" as otherwise
an uncomfortable inversion, unless this is crucial to the poem. Otherwise
fine.
bw
James
>From: arthur seeley <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Rewrite: Lost Worlds
>Date: Sun, 2 Feb 2003 12:19:01 -0000
>
> Lost Worlds
>
>
>Murmur of storytelling trees
>and the sibilance of tales woven by winds
>whispered through the leaves of a battered brown book.
>
>Days I lost myself in The Wild Wood;
>rumbled down The Open Road
>with the insufferable strut and bloat of Toad.
>
>
>Thin sunlight through taped windows,
>afternoons in a crowded classroom of coughs
>in a stone school in a grimy town ,
>
>
>but we were all Ratties, restless,
>Wayfarers All, with a stick and a pack
>on a wanderer’s road to unknown lands.
>
>
>I curled with Portly, safe,
>silent between the cloven hooves
>of The Piper at the Gates of Dawn;
>
>
>rolled with Moley through buttercups, O my,
>down meadows that billowed with sweet spring grass;
>trailed idly-drifting-afternoon fingers
>
>
>along the shining skin of a brown river,
>watched its winks and swirls, my elbow on a hamper
>filled with a picnic of dreams;
>
>
>chased the mayfly's scintillance with Otter
>and watched the glistening rings of his departure
>shimmer and fade as years glitter and die.
>
>Milestone on my journey into literacy.
>An old friendship renewed in a decayed building
>hands touch deep in the pile of tumbled books.
>
> ‘All books 5p each’.
>A nothing buys everything;
>a bauble purchases the world.
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