To our presence given over, dangerously,
the sodium light glares through
the frosted glass pane while the mouse
endlessly consumes its block of cheese.
Roger, a small suggestion.
I would replace some the's with a or an. The poems seems to need to break
away some, maybe with line and S break changes.
Gary
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sí, balas no!
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