Thanks to Gary and Mike for very constructive comments on this piece last
time, which is now changed out of all recognitin as I continue my struggle
with this form, more as an unwillingness to give up than a wish to produce a
book of the darned things. He's the current version. I'm sure you will tell
me what you think. Christina might tell me off for using a certain word I
think.

BREAK OUT INTO THE SUN

Break out into the sun, grab the essance
of life as earth's stones repel rays
sent through on these clearer days
and glance off as more sunlight draws sense
from the pouring out of its constancy.
You need the easy sense of insanity.

Sharp relief detail on the river is thrown
onto your eyes, disturbed by reflected sunlight.
A tree branch raised from the river, a finite
monstrous head, water logged and alone,
incongruous, waits for nothing to appear
only another heavy wave will take it further.

No bright tern or soaring kittiwake comes near -
intuitively aware of your metaphor.



bw
James




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