Hello again Arthur,
The villanelle form is not a great favourite of mine in itself but you´ve certainly made a very good job of resolving its difficulties here. I was a bit puzzled by line 2 in S3 but puzzlement is becoming something of a norm with me - I´ve just failed to notice the cigarette in Grasshopper´s poem and the penny didn´t drop until I opened your comment on that piece. Incidentally, was the phrase `winter hill´ suggested at all by the poem I posted recently, `On Winter Hill´? I don´t think anyone commented on the idea that the `winter hill´ of that poem was the narrator´s life.
Have a great seventieth.
Best wishes, Mike
--- Alkuperäinen viesti ---
Song for my Seventieth
Celebrate these accumulating years?
Who mounts to sing from this high winter hill
shall ring a peal from my bright bell of tears,
for everywhere derisive laughter jeers,
derides the many ways by which we will
celebrate these accumulating years.
I do regret this world?s brimful of fears,
and my bequest the darkening streets they fill.
They ring a peal from my bright bell of tears.
Though horrors gather as my birthday nears,
my family and my friends around me still
celebrate these accumulating years.
So love prevails, I hear their happy cheers,
who stride tomorrow's edge where young lives chill.
They ring a peal from my bright bell of tears.
Look for me then where no one comes and hears,
saddened and cold on my high winter hill.
Celebrate these accumulating years
and ring a peal from my bright bell of tears.
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