This is a lovely piece just wondered about the first line in the third
stanza and whether you could leave out the "of". Bw SallyJ
>From: arthur seeley <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New Sub: Song for my Seventieth
>Date: Tue, 28 Jan 2003 09:40:28 -0000
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> Song for my Seventieth
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>Celebrate these accumulating years?
>Who mounts to sing from this high winter hill
>shall ring a peal from my bright bell of tears,
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>for everywhere derisive laughter jeers,
>derides the many ways by which we will
>celebrate these accumulating years.
>
>I do regret this world’s brimful of fears,
>and my bequest the darkening streets they fill.
>They ring a peal from my bright bell of tears.
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>Though horrors gather as my birthday nears,
>my family and my friends around me still
>celebrate these accumulating years.
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>So love prevails, I hear their happy cheers,
>who stride tomorrow's edge where young lives chill.
>They ring a peal from my bright bell of tears.
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>Look for me then where no one comes and hears,
>saddened and cold on my high winter hill.
>Celebrate these accumulating years
>and ring a peal from my bright bell of tears.
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