Hello David,   
            This is a very nice piece. I won´t repeat those points that others have already made and which I agree with. In addition, I wonder a bit about the phrase `filled to the brim´ in S3. Do you think it could be too much of a set phrase here? I like the idea of the faded paint in S4 but I wonder if you´ve found the right comparison for it in the velvet. It may be just me but I picture the velvet on a chair as being a deeper, darker colour than the paint on the walls or woodwork and then you lose the impact of the fading of the paint. Could you make the comparison with anything else? Someone has already mentioned that ´life´ in S5 is a bit unnecessary, but what about replacing it with `light´? That would be in keeping with your theme. Hope these ideas are useful.

Best wishes,    Mike



--- Alkuperäinen viesti ---
Flowers in a garden waiting for
the edge of a blade
to cut them.

 A straw basket waits
for a hand on the handle
to bring flowers home.

The glass bottle painted purple,
 filled to the brim with water,
waits for sweet smells and colours.

A walnut table in the room with
paint faded lighter than the velvet
that covers my chair.

I am here with the flowers,
life, colours in full bloom,
waiting for the fading.