Bob and grasshopper - this is very helpful - it's useful to know when being
too minimal has threatened the sense
hmmm
yes
she is 'outside' but in a waiting room. He knocks.
I shall have to work on making it clearer
How about
The ante-room
‘Do you mind?’ ‘Of course not.’ So she waits,
poised in elegant discomfort,
supervised by cut glass decanters
and past-painted presidents.
His knock.
Perfectly controlled, she breathes, ‘Come in’,
a millisecond late as if
she might have been engaged.
‘The membership committee have considered your request.’
A pause. He coughs. Polite, she looks away,
out into the winter garden, where,
awkward as a toe-hole in a tight-tucked sheet of snow
a bunch of grubby snowdrops
hang their heads.
Terri )O(
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