> Hello Calaya,
Thanks for your comments on this piece. IŽll give your idea some thought.
Best wishes, Mike
> From: calaya <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: 2003/12/20 Sat AM 03:21:00 EET
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: new sub : Hindsight
>
> hi mike,
> i like everything about this poem
> but i get a strong sound of a change in tempo between
> lines 5 & 6 and wonder about a stansza break, with
> line 6 leading the transition, as:
>
> when energy flowed like sap
> and the stream released from amnesiac ice?
> And to what extent did the fall
> ***
> all the way to:
> that at last agrees with him?
>
> see what u think. i may be daft
> later
> calaya
>
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