Blind Sight
I saw a bird that flew nowhere
and a dog that barked never ending
You glimpsed a woman abandoned
He watched a child not cherished
She viewed a man in tatters
They stared at the homeless unremembered
I observed galaxies erupting
and looked unto the back of G-d
Ryfkah 12/17/03
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Hi Ryfkah,
I appreciate what I'm interpreting here, but am
unclear that I'm hearing what it wants to say. I seem
to be rather nit picky about titles lately, so this
may just be me, but: my personal take on what blind
sight means gives me an expectation and I think *that
leaves me the most unclear.
If I do * hear this, I want to hear it more clearly.
So I've done something i seldom do for various
reasons...and sent along a sample of how that might
sound. Thanks for letting me play with your work and I
hope that doesn't offend:
Birds that fly nowhere
Dogs that bark forever
Women abandoned
Children not cherished
Men in tatters
The forgotten homeless
and galaxies erupting.
Glimpses of the unspeakable.
later,
calaya
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