Ciaran, interesting that here
then came back, projected onto people
in the street, turning up everywhere, as if
you had swung into a darkness where
not even thoughts could reach, and then
you break on weak words, odd breaks, but breaks that generally work. But
after you quit when here
now to balance out the pull
it had /on you, for you to give your side
and here
your restless intelligence, your touch.
I could /have phoned you once, or wrote, but now
at the / you could have continued, maybe at others also. (but now does
continue)
If a line break is a mini-pause, or something more than simply a poetic
convenience, it would be interesting to see how the poem would read with
none of these breaks or more.
Smiles and thanks.
Gary
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