> Hello David,
Thanks for your feedback. Glad you liked the piece.
best wishes, Mike
> Lähettäjä: David Anthony <[log in to unmask]>
> Päiväys: 2003/11/18 ti AM 03:02:36 GMT+02:00
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> Aihe: Re: New sub: Dents du midi
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> Dents Du Midi
> Fine writing.
> I know the area pretty well, and you capture its essence.
> Excellent close, with its tie up to the title.
> Some may say there are too many modifiers, but I think they are a good fit
> to the theme.
> Best regards,
> David
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Mike Horwood" <[log in to unmask]>
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> Sent: 17 November 2003 12:55
> Subject: New sub: Dents du midi
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> Startling, our first view of the mountains,
> massive and snow-streaked in the near heavens.
> The higher peaks gleam white against a blue sky
> like teeth in the jaw of a snow leopard
> that stalks over starving slopes.
> I feel I could reach out and put my hand
> into their pristine, white-fanged world,
> like stroking a cat.
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> Down the hill a white bridge crosses the river
> to the old town. Its russet roofs,
> its melon domes and square towers
> spread across the plain, exposed
> and naked in the sunlight.
> The ruddy buildings ripen like fruit
> among the yellowing elm trees
> under the eyes of the prowling peaks.
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> Wind flows off the mountains.
> The snow leopard´s whiskers brush
> the roofs and in the tortuous
> winding streets two worlds meet.
> Stepping out of the chill of a shady alley
> as the hands pass twelve
> we set off hungrily
> on a hunt for something to eat.
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> Mike
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