Hi Bob,
it occurs to me that I haven't responded to your note yet - apologies for
that.
Glad you've enjoyed it. I've changed the title now to: 'and what about the
ram's blood'. Think that's a little easier to cope with.
Cheers,
Drank
> Hi Frank,
> I'm enjoying reading this, each time I log on! It still feels fresh and
> vivid in how it does what it does: all the words are working well!
> I like poems that capture moments the way this poem does. Makes something
> special, memorable, real. I feel as if I was there -
> But I'm not sure about the title... if it were a part of speech in the
poem
> I may accept it, but it feels kinda stuck on as a title.
> Bob
>
>
> >From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: sub - have ewe any flocking ram's blood
> >Date: Mon, 10 Nov 2003 20:32:24 +1100
> >
> >have ewe any flocking ram's blood
> >
> >what a great big dopey looking
> >nong of a man
> >is this young bloke
> >
> >mouth hung open
> >his eyes look like they're seeing
> >something amazing
> >or maybe just unfocussed
> >from the effort of getting out of bed
> >
> >fit as a bull though
> >exercises with his top off in the courtyard sun
> >all six-pack and biceps
> >
> >doesn't say much
> >asks for towels in the morning
> >for his cigarettes
> >and for the rams' blood
> >
> >says lambrusco will do it
> >
> >what's lambrusco
> >
> >do what
> >
> >he says it brings the aliens
> >mutters something about having them
> >inside him
> >gestures as though he's pulling them out
> >either them or it could be
> >his heart
> >
> >and what about that rams' blood
> >do we have any
> >
> >I tell him that
> >though people might flock to get here
> >we don't admit sheep
> >onto the ward
> >because we like to treat each patient
> >as an individual
> >
> >thinks about it for a minute
> >then laughs
> >he gets the joke
> >the absurdity of it
> >he's quite handsome
> >when he laughs
> >
> >then his face gets dopey again
> >and he wanders off
> >to find some clean pyjamas to wear
> >while he washes his clothes
> >in the laundry
> >
> >~
>
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