Hi Paul,
I like this poem best of those you've just posted. It seems more accessible
than the rest. It's a real reverie... that lets me look at things in both
ways (in more than one way) too!
And the first line! Wow!!! (Why didn't I ever think of doing that?). Great!
I like it.
Bob
>From: paul murphy <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: submission - women
>Date: Sun, 16 Nov 2003 21:09:58 +0000
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>WOMEN
>
>Women, women, women, women, women
>many things about their habitual redundancies, leavings.
>if they had freedom from the chains of hooverdoom
>they might reach for hypocritical knives
>to sink into theoretical tailor's dummies or voodoo dolls.
>images, fetishism, sado-masochism, scopophilia.
>Bigwordtime. Claudia is leaving me
>she is taking the train home
>she knows the silky sound of snapping emergency cords
>more than the sounds of field mice, dogs, rats,
>Bohemian cows in rotund fields.
>tea leaf, tractor, pitchfork, axe
>good tools for devouring men.
>everything on the farm is fucking
>in its pre-determined genetic way
>ordained by Claudia - Freia, Demeter
>Artemis, Venus -
>Earth Mother, goddess of vine, earth and shit
>she looks one way to the field the other to the sun.
>
>this poem is dedicated to my girlfriend, but the name is changed
>at her request
>
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