Hi Frank,
A fine piece. It works really well.
... I too was wondering about the last line... it somehow doesn't feel as
conversational as what's gone before...
I'd almost be tempted to write:
Hey, time to get back to work.
Bob
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Sub - not a lot, anymore
>Date: Sun, 16 Nov 2003 07:36:52 +1100
>
>not a lot, anymore
>
>we're standing in the staff courtyard
>it's break time
>and we're doing coffee and a cigarette
>when he says to me
>
>I've always worked in psych
>I love it
>
>I've never been tempted
>by anything else
>
>it's changed though
>from the old days
>oh
>a hell of a lot really
>
>a deep drag
>the blue smoke of a moment of reflection
>a sip out of the styofoam cup
>and he adds
>
>you know what
>
>about a year ago
>we had a real old fashioned case come in
>like we used to get
>in the old days
>
>no drugs
>no family history
>no obvious causes
>just crazy
>
>mad as a cut snake actually
>
>it was a first presentation
>and it took a while
>but we fixed him up
>he got better and we turned him loose
>he hasn't been back
>
>that's what I like best
>good straight-forward madness
>that you can do something with
>
>but you don't see much of that
>anymore
>
>time to get back to work
>
>~
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