Mike, I would tighten some
We came to see the winter palace,
just two among the thousands. (no the
We walked along the north facade,
admired its thrusting columns.
We observed the towers and turrets (and here
and the cupola on the roof,
wandered through the garden
with its fountains spouting spray. (no its
and the end falls flat
At least that´s what I think.
I can´t speak for my companion.
not enough twist, maybe too obvious?
otherwise, good read.
Thanks.
Gary
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