Dear Mike,
I like the idea behind this poem, but I feel the execution could be much
more subtle.The voice is rather odd, as if it's a record of minutes, which
would work if the other chap is the narrator, but he isn't, is he?
What I felt in the poem was a lack of progression -it's as if you just make
the same point again and again, without building to any sort of climax.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
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From: "Mike Horwood" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, November 10, 2003 9:58 AM
Subject: [THE-WORKS] New sub: The Winter Palace And Commerce
The winter palace and commerce
I met him on a tour of the winter palace.
On the chequered tiles of the hall
he enquired about my profession
and informed me of his.
Mounting the marble staircase
with a hand on a gilded banister
he averred his commitment to total quality,
hereinafter referred to as TQ.
Pausing before a Botticelli
he advised against investing in bio-technology.
He felt very strongly about this.
Gazing up at a moulded ceiling
he maintained that stock values had risen too high.
When I asked about share prices,
he grew angry. He was talking, he said,
about stock levels in his warehouse.
He was not silent for long though.
With his back to the secretaire´s marquetry and mounts
he extolled the benefits of outsourcing.
TQ, I learned, is linked to core functions.
Passing beneath a 200-year-old chandelier
he cracked a joke: Competition is like a gardener,
he said, it weeds out the weaklings.
Standing before a cabinet of rococo china
he explained that TQ is concerned with processes:
Look after the process and the product will look after itself.
Without a blush amongst the panelling
and velvet of the royal bedchamber
he emphasised the importance of quality certification
which is part of TQ, if I understood right.
Beside an ornamental fountain
in the symmetrical garden
he asked me what I had thought of the place.
Mike
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