I would consider cutting this section, Gary, it just isn't up to the
real excellence of the beginning. Think about another ending or at least
remove "as your bottom spreads." It may be true, but it is completely out
of tune
with the voice you have established here. Hope this helps, Sue
Sue, thinking. The gent for whom I wrote this as a companion liked it.
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well - is food a poetic subject or isnt it? What does everyone think?
bw
SallyE
Sally, indeed. Among the best I've seen is a volume that combines recipes
and poems, but the food oh so rich.
Thanks, friends.
Gary
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