> Hello Gary,
Thanks for your comments on this one. I agree with you about the first `the´, the axe is sharp and poised over that one. Cutting the shy-hair line is going to hurt a lot more. It´s under consideration. Thanks again for your suggestions.
Best wishes, Mike
> From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: 2003/10/30 Thu PM 07:22:00 EET
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> Subject: Re: New sub: Gift
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> Mike, fine work. A couple of wee suggestions
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> and hard, or lie in the dew-soaked
> grass in the shade below the trunks.
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> (cut one of the the's, the first would be best
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> The sky is as black as your hair.
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> (Cut is though that is a tougher call
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> Thanks much.
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> Gary
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