Mike, fine work. A couple of wee suggestions
and hard, or lie in the dew-soaked
grass in the shade below the trunks.
(cut one of the the's, the first would be best
The sky is as black as your hair.
(Cut is though that is a tougher call
Thanks much.
Gary
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