> Hello Grasshopper,
This is great fun. At least, I take it that way! Thereīs nothing I could possibly suggest or query here. Although there is an observation I would make, concerning diction. I notice you use phrases with rather different tones - `the height of mindīs disdainī sounds quite Shakesperian, whereas `whole-hogī is more like contemporary slang. I donīt think it matters at all in a piece like this, in fact I think it adds to the fun. I just thought Iīd mention it in case someone else does and I wouldnīt want it to appear that Iīd missed it ;-)
Best wishes, Mike
> From: grasshopper <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: 2003/10/19 Sun AM 06:35:46 EEST
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: New sub : The Ex-Romantic (prov. title)
>
> The Ex-Romantic (provisional title)
> with apologies to E.B.B.
>
>
> How do I hate you? Let me count the ways:
> I hate you from the bottom of my bowels,
> and from the height of mind's disdain, with blaze
> of bile, and with the throat's disgusted howls.
> I hate whole-hog. I hate your stubbly jowls,
> your farts, your lies, your smirks, the way you laze
> while I wash up, the way you drop damp towels.
> I hate you faithfully through all our days.
>
> I live in hope you'll be an early croaker;
> a Matterhorn of fat may cause a stroke, a
> Windermere of beer may choke a joker.
> A light? Thank God you're such a heavy smoker.
> One day in hell your fire may need a stoker -
> I'll be one busy devil with the poker.
>
> grasshopper
>
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