> Hello again, again Bob,
If IŽd looked ahead I could have put all these replies in one message, but neŽer mind, eh? Regarding the comma, I think the exclamation mark makes for a different rhythm, the pause after `windŽ becomes stronger and longer, and the tone is more...well, exclamatory. I donŽt think it would really change the meaning, though, to substitute a comma.
Best wishes, Mike
> From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: 2003/10/17 Fri PM 07:21:38 EEST
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: New sub: Wind
>
> Hi Mike,
> Yeh!
> I keep wondering about the word "unconscionable" - maybe because I can't
> remember ever coming across it before... (maybe I should just stand up,
> wander over the the shelf where the dictionaries are kept and look for it!
> I'm sometimes just too lazy...)
> And I wonder it "Wind!" ought to have a comma after it (do you think it
> changes possible meanings if it has?)
> But I like what I find here!
> Bob
>
>
> >From: Mike Horwood <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: New sub: Wind
> >Date: Thu, 16 Oct 2003 16:27:55 +0300
> >
> >Wind
> >
> >Magnificent, the wind! racing through
> >the branches of this brave new morning,
> >out of the unconscionable stillness,
> >headlong into the prison-house wall.
> >
> >
> >
> >Mike
>
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