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Hi Sally,
I'm wondering if this monolgue may not work better with more in the present
tense? I sort of sense reminisence can be used but I'd feel happier if it
began like it's ending, sort of conversational, speaking more directly to
the reader.
Whaddya think?
I haven't looked up how tigers live? Singly or in groups (is it just lions
that have prides?). In fact I don't know if tigers live anywhere near
zebras???
Bob
>From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New Sub: The Tiger's Poem
>Date: Fri, 17 Oct 2003 03:09:20 +0100
>
>Hi folks, I havent written much that came out, lately. This is new and
>probably crazy. Crits apprec. First of all - do tigers climb up trees?
>
>The Tiger's Poem.
>
>Drowsily we'd lie in the trees,
>contemplating the orange light,
>bright enough to hide our lamp-like pelts
>in its rolling sandscape. Cats with spots
>or dull and leonine, strolled around
>sizing up zebra, slowly calculated
>the expenditure of energy required
>for a spring and a leap. Waterholes
>shimmered like mirages, which we knew
>were there by the tracks of animals
>ready to time-share their common need.
>There we'd lie flat above browsing height,
>peer through the level clipped by herbivores,
>thicken the shadow on a pool of land,
>red sky and foliage above.
>
>Savannah grass is green and deep,
>a sea where formerly a sky
>concealed us. This is better for our young,
>but we are sentimental sometimes.
>A Tiger can look back, nostalgical
>to think about his favourite tree,
>a broad wood limb on which he'd loll
>and view all comers - Still, life's good.
>So, how many cubs you got just now?
>Can't stay all day in idle chat.
>Some Ibex just passed by I mean to follow.
>
>Sally Evans
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