I understood you Roger, and I agree with your desire to explore
different aspects of any individual  work.
My desire was not to be argumentative, but rather to express my belief
in the principle that one perspective is not innately superior to the
other. As for rhythm... there are a few stumbles... but over all it is
distinctly present to my ear.
I am working through a detailed crit of the piece now, which I shall
post to the group as soon as I've completed it.

Regards,
Wendy

Roger Collett wrote:

>Hi Wendy,
>
>When I suggested *form* for a rewrite it was to allow a different aspect to
>appear and I find it a good way of surveying the subject matter from a
>different angle. Nothing wrong with free verse, but it needs to have a
>rhythm and this is not as rhythmical as Sally's usual writing. Surprisingly
>so with her Welsh heritage. As for academic value, Dean, this is not a
>university class.
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>Roger.
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