Sally adds: this comment makes a lot of sense of Christina's poems, which I
keep wanting to go on to traditional length and give more of the picture. To
me this one's atmosphere is from the date, the sailor suits and even the
polishing all smell of build- up to war.
Christina wrote
> I think one of my main interests in poetry
>> may be to try to offer the reader space to interact freely with what's there
>> without worrying about whether something makes sense or requires this or that
>> tone.
>
> Mike adds:
> This sounds very much like what Iīve been trying to do with some of my recent
> postings, including the latest, Letters. They donīt make literal, everyday
> sense, but Iīm after a tone or atmosphere that the reader hopefully responds
> to and can fit to whatever `narrativeī they want to make from the text.
>
>
> You wrote:
> I'd buy you a drink if you were here:-)
>
>
> Mike adds:
> Iīm on my way :-)
>
>
> Best wishkies, Mike
>
>
>>
>>
>>>> Hello Christina,
>>> I like this very much. The piece has a certain tone but I canīt
>>> find a word to describe it, itīs sad and wistful in part but thereīs
>>> something
>>> a bit inimical, almost threatening, about it (or is it just me?) The heavy
>>> stress on `dead menī after the childlike image and swinging rhythm of
>>> `sea-saw
>>> boys in sailor suitsī really pulls me up. Itīs a very good line, so is line
>>> 3, again with the violent element contained in `rotī. A whole lost world is
>>> implied in the first stanza, like the lost smell of cinnamon, but the loss
>>> is
>>> presented almost like a threat. Thatīs what Iīm trying to say. Do you read
>>> it
>>> that way? If this is a working draft, I donīt think Iīd change anything.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> Best wishes, Mike
>>
>>
>>
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