> Hello Sue,
Yes, this reads much tighter and more focused than the first version, I think. It was a good idea to drop the `-ing´ on have.
Best wishes, Mike
> Lähettäjä: Sue Scalf <[log in to unmask]>
> Päiväys: 2003/09/26 pe PM 08:33:18 GMT+03:00
> Vastaanottaja: [log in to unmask]
> Aihe: Roses revised
>
> Another Poem About Roses
>
>
> Don Juan's, climbers,
> have worked their way
> up the trellis to a rendezvous,
> blossoms big
> as cups, heart's- blood-red,
> feverish for a change of seasons,
> change of lovers.
> I, too, have had enough of summer,
> welcome a dormancy,
> winter and wind.
> And yet I know
> despite whatever springs may come,
> I shall never love again.
> One more for the roses,
> one more, my love, for you.
>
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