Dear Mike,
I think it would work better with fewer bonks, as it feels you've
laboured the point, and fresher metaphors -regular as clockwork is so
obvious as to seem lazy.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
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From: "Mike Horwood" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Friday, September 26, 2003 10:17 AM
Subject: [THE-WORKS] New sub: If father Shandy´s clock could speak
If Father Shandy´s Clock Could Speak....
Regular as clockwork, you wind me up
on the first Sunday of every month,
and faithfully, like an old retainer,
I serve you, bonking out the quarters,
bonking the hours especially,
one bonk for each!
My bonking rings through the house,
winding you up as the month goes by
with the result well-known to Mrs Shandy.
That evening, just after my bonk of ten
I heard its faint echo from upstairs
and how the association of ideas
led your good wife to ask;
Pray, my dear, have you not forgot to wind the clock?
Mike
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