Hi Mike,

Thank you.

The love making worried me a lot, too. Difficult stuff to write that causes
me great trepidation (thank goodness it's over LOL).

I'll try to finish my editing process today and move them along a bit. It's
beena couple of days since I penned anything, and that makes me nervous, as
I like to write 'hot' - keep them coming until the series is finished.
Hopefully I'll be able to find their space again.

Cheers,

Frank

> Hello again Frank,
                    taking a piggy back with this one. I think `blackie
keeps watch´ succeeds very well. It´s lovely, in fact. I´d endorse Barbara´s
suggestion but I´ve nothing to add. I think you´ve managed to bring it off
(if I might be permitted that choice of words) with `ms e awakens´, too. I
liked the opening very much. I was holding my breath when we got the serious
business of making love. It´s so difficult to write about it convincingly
and seriously and tenderly without slipping into sentiment and
over-sweetness. But I think you´ve managed it very well. There´s certainly
nothing that I could suggest altering.




Best wishes,   Mike
> >
> > blackie keeps watch
> >
> >
> > it isn't dark
> > some light
> > is filtering through the lace
> > across the window
> > enough to see more than shapes
> > sufficient to identify
> > features
> >
> > she is draped across him
> > sleeping
> > while he watches her
> > through the veil
> > of approaching morning***how about approaching dawn,don't like the
double
> > ING's
> >
> > he can see
> > her hair
> > can feel it on the skin of his chest
> > the shape of her head her face
> > the weight of it
> >
> > strokes an exposed cheek
> > gently
> > to make a smile
> > in her sleep
> > not to wake her
> >
> > the lines of her body
> > run away from him***love this line, Frank
> > towards the end of the bed
> > one leg bent across him
> > at a right angle
> > to the rest of her
> > the other
> > a parallel to his own
> >
> > the touch of her fingers
> > the nails
> > on his skin
> > is astounding
> >
> > he is amazed
> > at what has happened
> > what he has done
> > with her
> >
> > what she has done
> > for him
> >
> > her gift
> >
> > amazed
> >
> > he cannot stop
> > watching
> >
> > ~~~~~~~~~
> >
> >
> > ms e awakens
> >
> >
> > she is waking
> > blinks
> >
> > can feel the lashes
> >  of her eye
> > flick against the hair of his chest
> > her face pressed against him
> >
> > doesn't move
> > against the warmth and comfort
> >
> > awareness
> > builds slowly
> > and she remembers
> > the power of it
> > the sensation of him
> > embraced
> > and held tight
> > until the trembling
> > grew too strong
> > forced her to release him
> >
> > again seeing the look
> >  on his face
> > concentrated
> > far away
> > almost as though experiencing
> > an agony
> > while he moved
> > she
> > moving with him
> > matching him
> >
> > gasping aloud
> > when he came
> >
> > almost a sob
> >
> > holding her
> > his head buried in her shoulder
> > but staying with her
> > urging
> > while she caught him up
> > then came down
> >
> > so comfortable
> > to have him there
> > in the afterwards
> > un-hurried
> > rippling pleasures
> > persisting
> > at intervals
> > making her catch her breath
> > and laugh
> > at the same time
> >
> > so good
> >
> > the way he looked
> > when he raised his head
> > sheepish
> > grateful
> > relieved
> > glad
> > such a mixture of things
> > in this man
> >
> > ~
> >
> > she still has not moved
> > thinks he may be asleep
> > but can't be sure
> >
> > moves her hand
> > secretly
> > raising it
> > to almost not touching
> > until a hinted aura of contact
> > is all
> >
> > moves it along his skin
> > staying just above it
> > across his nipple
> > and down
> > below his chest
> >
> > still secretly
> >
> > feathering belly hair
> >
> > stopped
> > by his kiss
> > to the top of her head
> >
> > continues
> >
> > ~
> >
>
> Sweet love making, Frank.  One suggestion above.
> Barbara
>
>