Hi Bob,

Had to laugh about 'sheepish'. I'll work over the poems again and take these
comments into account, to try to get the thing as good as I'm able.

many many thanks for help and assistance.

Trult grateful.

Frank


> Hi Frank,
> I'm thinking of the very first stanza, does the poem need it?
> The rest is great! Fine erotic/sensual writing. (The word "sheepish" felt
a
> bit distracting for me as well... but that might just be me! Who's always
> had great trouble trying to connect the word "sheepish" with any
expression
> I've ever seen on any sheep's face!)
> Bob
>
> >~~~~~~~~~~
> >blackie keeps watch
> >
> >it isn't dark
> >some light
> >is filtering through the lace
> >across the window
> >enough to see more than shapes
> >sufficient to identify
> >features
> >
> >she is draped across him
> >sleeping
> >while he watches her
> >through the veil
> >of approaching morning
> >
> >he can see
> >her hair
> >can feel it on the skin of his chest
> >the shape of her head her face
> >the weight of it
> >
> >strokes an exposed cheek
> >gently
> >to make a smile
> >in her sleep
> >not to wake her
> >
> >the lines of her body
> >run away from him
> >towards the end of the bed
> >one leg bent across him
> >at a right angle
> >to the rest of her
> >the other
> >a parallel to his own
> >
> >the touch of her fingers
> >the nails
> >on his skin
> >is astounding
> >
> >he is amazed
> >at what has happened
> >what he has done
> >with her
> >
> >what she has done
> >for him
> >
> >her gift
> >
> >amazed
> >
> >he cannot stop
> >watching
> >
> >~~~~~~~~~
> >ms e awakens
> >
> >she is waking
> >blinks
> >
> >can feel the lashes
> >of her eye
> >flick against the hair of his chest
> >her face pressed against him
> >
> >doesn't move
> >against the warmth and comfort
> >
> >awareness
> >builds slowly
> >and she remembers
> >the power of it
> >the sensation of him
> >embraced
> >and held tight
> >until the trembling
> >grew too strong
> >forced her to release him
> >
> >again seeing the look
> >on his face
> >concentrated
> >far away
> >almost as though experiencing
> >an agony
> >while he moved
> >she
> >moving with him
> >matching him
> >
> >gasping aloud
> >when he came
> >
> >almost a sob
> >
> >holding her
> >his head buried in her shoulder
> >but staying with her
> >urging
> >while she caught him up
> >then came down
> >
> >so comfortable
> >to have him there
> >in the afterwards
> >un-hurried
> >rippling pleasures
> >persisting
> >at intervals
> >making her catch her breath
> >and laugh
> >at the same time
> >
> >so good
> >
> >the way he looked
> >when he raised his head
> >sheepish
> >grateful
> >relieved
> >glad
> >such a mixture of things
> >in this man
> >
> >~
> >
> >she still has not moved
> >thinks he may be asleep
> >but can't be sure
> >
> >moves her hand
> >secretly
> >raising it
> >to almost not touching
> >until a hinted aura of contact
> >is all
> >
> >moves it along his skin
> >staying just above it
> >across his nipple
> >and down
> >below his chest
> >
> >still secretly
> >
> >feathering belly hair
> >
> >stopped
> >by his kiss
> >to the top of her head
> >
> >continues
> >
> >~
>
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