Hi Barbara,
Just a quick thought...
A saxophone that gently bleeds and a guitar that gently weeps... I guess
"gently" has been taken by George Harrison and I can't get the similarity
out of my head - how about anyone else?
I also like the point that the first line says the night is cool! Is this
sax being played out of doors? If it is then it's a fine way of having
things that usually happen somewhere in the warmth of indoors happening
outside in the chill air - that gives the pretending another edge.
Bob
>From: Barbara Ostrander <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Longing
>Date: Tue, 2 Sep 2003 09:12:20 EDT
>
>An older one that I've taken out and messed with some. All c&c welcome.
>
>Barbara
>
>
>Longing
>
>across the cool night's sigh
>sad sax music gently bleeds
>wraps its aching arms
>around you and me
>whispers its promise oh so soft
>for all that might have been
>
>let's pretend
>
>pretend for just this moment
>that you and I are happy
>remember the taste and trail
>of fingertips down the keys
>play the smooth and silky notes
>of love with ease
>
>BBO
>8/02
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