Hi Anti,
I thought this was a nicely handled description of the scene and the animal in question. I would suggest cutting the final two lines. I feel that the question sounds a bit ponderous and breaks the mood of the rest. Ending with the short, four line stanza, `...../Bob sleeps´ leaves the whole scene remaining nicelt in the reader´s imagination.
Best wishes, Mike
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Bob.
When a car slows or seems to stop
before the curve into our drive,
Bob hurtles to the window,
scrambles to the sill
in a slurry of cushions.
A car-door slams,
an engine accelerates,
and he turns, embarrassed;
his head lolling,
he slides through cushions
to nuzzle my toes.
I stroke his throat
and scratch between his ears.
He spirals down upon himself
with little moans
and groans of pleasure.
The fire crackles,
the clock ticks,
I read my book.
Bob sleeps.
Who will scratch between my ears
to alleviate my sense of loss?
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