Frank, I found this a very sensual poem, and original in its whimsical
professorial yet passionate tone. The 'undercurrent of a poem' is
well-imaged, and plays with my mind deliciously - those fish conversations,
all swirl and tail and glide....And "barely faint" - great phrase.
I would mmmmmmm prefer "tailwag" to "wagtail" with its bird connection?
Can you get red sparklers? Where from? I want one, I want one, I waaaannnnt
one! Philip
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: SUb - writing in the moon
>Date: Mon, 20 Jan 2003 22:34:12 +1100
>
>shall I write for you
>dear reader
>the way a fish might do
>in swirls and circles
>through the water
>barely faint disturbance
>to the placid surface
>all energy
>under current
>
>perhaps the wagtail
>curlicues and exclamations
>spattered all across the page
>aura-format memoranda
>of excitement
>hard contained
>
>shall I pen
>my name in sparkler red
>and orange
>a continuous flow
>of letters
>until the glow fades
>and you cannot see me writ
>before you anymore
>
>shall I for you
>as the feather
>quilling in
>a free-float of words
>that gentle
>around suggested meanings
>and take their time
>to reach a point
>but pretty
>so very pretty
>on their wafted way
>
>perhaps you'd care
>to puff them back
>a never concluded
>sentence suspended
>a mystery in air
>
>or shall I etch in echoes
>of the words you say
>you say you say
>paraphrase
>to let you read on paper
>that I can hear you
>loud and clear
>and clear
>but ever
>more
>faintly
>
>perhaps I'll smelt the way
>the sun imprints
>through heat and sear
>burn like a rage
>at the height of noon
>but no
>the lunar sphere has words
>that seem to me more elegant
>
>silver
>was always more
>the colour
>I wrote best
>
>I will in silver
>
>the way the moon
>
>~
>
>Frank
>
>
>
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