Hello Ann,
A powerful and thoughtful piece. One suggestion; what about changing the fullstop after `invisibility´ to a comma?I think it might read better that way.
Best wishes, Mike
--- Alkuperäinen viesti ---
JEZEBEL
Queuing for kisses
they come and go,
paying for perfection.
Time out
from terminal headaches
uncertain land mines
and bruising invisibility.
A war free zone where
she mends and patches.
Neighbours,
righteous as snipers
wait in ambush
with words.
Toss them
like hand grenades.
G.B.H. with intent.
Scattered bits of her
left in the street.
For her children
to step over
on the way to school.
Ann Stockton
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