Even though I didn't actually comment before
I liked the original poem
and the follow-up
but now I think you've stretched
the metaphor a bit too far.
Whilst technically I find little wrong with this poem
it seems to getting a bit incestuous.
Time I think to pack the bag
and try another journey
all the best
Gerald
Gerald, who can argue? I like to do bits like III simply to see where I can
take the silliness, this one actually not as far as a great many.
Thanks.
Gary
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