Dear Roger,
I don't see any problem about varying traditional rhyme-schemes,
and in fact, I think a change in rhyme scheme after the volta stresses the
turn in the argument, and the 'ecstatic' voice of Icarus.
I've seen many modern sonnets that ignored the trad. cdecde Petrarchan
close -I think that's why the modern sonnet is so versatile -it offers
infinite possibilities for variation.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
----- Original Message -----
From: "Roger Collett" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Sunday, August 24, 2003 12:49 AM
Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] New sub: The Ghost of Icarus-Sue, Ryfkah
> Grassy
> Did you really mean to do this?
> You now have an Italian/Elizabethan hybrid.
> Roger
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "grasshopper" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Saturday, August 23, 2003 9:15 PM
> Subject: Re: New sub: The Ghost of Icarus-Sue, Ryfkah
>
>
> > Ryfkah and Sue,
> > Glad you liked it.
> > It's a first draft, and I've already revised it to give the octave the
> > traditional Petrarchan 2 rhyme-scheme, by substituting veer/steer for
> > yearn/turn.
> > Kind regards,Maz
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Ryfkah *" <[log in to unmask]>
> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > Sent: Saturday, August 23, 2003 6:24 PM
> > Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] New sub: The Ghost of Icarus
> >
> >
> > > Grassy
> > >
> > > Your poem recreates both emotional and physical experience through a
> myth.
> > > It is a profound tome imho.
> > >
> > > kol tuv, Ryfkah
> > >
> > >
> > > In a message dated 08.23.03 12:46:27 AM,
> > [log in to unmask]
> > > writes:
> > >
> > > <<
> > >
> > > I thought it best to die still free, aflame,
> > >
> > > not risk some rueful future, clipped and tame. >>
> > >
>
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