Grassy
Did you really mean to do this?
You now have an Italian/Elizabethan hybrid.
Roger
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From: "grasshopper" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, August 23, 2003 9:15 PM
Subject: Re: New sub: The Ghost of Icarus-Sue, Ryfkah
> Ryfkah and Sue,
> Glad you liked it.
> It's a first draft, and I've already revised it to give the octave the
> traditional Petrarchan 2 rhyme-scheme, by substituting veer/steer for
> yearn/turn.
> Kind regards,Maz
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Ryfkah *" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Saturday, August 23, 2003 6:24 PM
> Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] New sub: The Ghost of Icarus
>
>
> > Grassy
> >
> > Your poem recreates both emotional and physical experience through a
myth.
> > It is a profound tome imho.
> >
> > kol tuv, Ryfkah
> >
> >
> > In a message dated 08.23.03 12:46:27 AM,
> [log in to unmask]
> > writes:
> >
> > <<
> >
> > I thought it best to die still free, aflame,
> >
> > not risk some rueful future, clipped and tame. >>
> >
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