I think the second stanza is too abstract; could be omitted or reduced.
vw
SallyE
on 21/8/03 3:23 am, c s shah at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> Self-identity
>
> Brisk pace,
> head turns over and over again,
> queer echoes of own footsteps
> ring from lonesome jungle bell.
>
> Figures of speech,
> ideas imagine ideas -
> thoughts take forms of words
> powerful enough to frighten.
>
> Hushed silence; fear is inside,
> and I look out for a footmark -
> a paw of unusual shape,
> grotesque and illusorily real.
>
> A shadow exactly suits my stature,
> covers me as my duplicate; ever.
> --
>
> c s shah
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