I am not sure of the title - "Side Effect".
> I wish you had meet me then
> so you could remember when
I am unable to see the relation here; between these two lines.
Moreover the emotions do not come out fully; addition of a stanza or two
would help make the poem more meaningful.
c s shah
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> Side Effect
>
> I smooth the wrinkles on my skin
> the way I used to smooth an un-ironed shirt
> beneath the palm of my hand = (this line can be omitted)
> the folds that now caved in
> and I remember when it wasn't so
> when all was taut and had a healthy glow
>
> I wish you had met me then
> so you could remember when
>
> BBO
> © 8/15/03
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