And, a nit: I feel the title's not yet a title! Part of me wants to
suggest something like "To Be Read On May The (Whatever) Every Year" - or
something with even more force than that!
I did wonder about the way you've merged the names together but, in the end,
think it's OK... but have you considered using an & inbetween, or using Caps
for their first letters? I guess you've tried it... (It's the balance
between keeping them close together and being seen as individuals, I
guess...)
Bob
Bob, thanks for the comments. I'm rethinking the title. But want to keep
the names as run together.
Gary
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