Hi again Anti Dora,
Another well made poem!
It's interesting that you use a word like "hated" that carries strong
feeling and "assented" that, to me at least, implies a lack of feeling! I
like that subtlety.
I like the way you give me a lot of silence to discover things for myself.
And I like her poem! The text and the context work so well!
Bob
>From: Anti Dora <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Resia’s last poem
>Date: Mon, 11 Aug 2003 00:07:45 +0100
>
>The room was redolent of oranges,
>rich with the zest of torn peel.
>Resia, ALS-imprisoned
>almost choked on her own saliva.
>I swabbed her mouth,
>massaged her meagre limbs
>with baby oil.
>Mewing, she bade me take
>the hated letter board.
>A flicker of her eye-lid
>assented to my choice of letter.
>And so we wrote her last poem:
>
>“A boy eats oranges beneath my window.
>His fingers tear the peel.
>His mouth is full of juice.
>Please, do not close my window yet.”
>
>
>note: ALS means Amyotrophic Lateral Sclerosis ; also called MND (motor-
>neuron disease) or Lou Gehrig’s disease.
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