Hi Barbara,
I'm thinking much the same as Frank, here. So I'm just adding a "Yeh" to
what he's written. It's all the subtlety of past and present tense. I guess
if poets were employed to write adverts (as they sometimes have been) the
coffee futures market - in this case - would be in a frenzy!
Bob
Who grinds the stuff every morning and has two mugs before he can even think
about looking to see if it's stopped raining!
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: Breakfast Blend
>Date: Sun, 10 Aug 2003 11:00:45 +1000
>
>Vey nice Barbara, I like the taste and smell aspects much.
>
>A couple of small suggestions to consider.
>
>the way you slid down my throat - consider 'slide'
>
>as welcome as fresh baked bread, - consider deleting 'as' at beginning.
>
>Cheers,
>
>Frank
>
>
>
>
> Breakfast Blend
>
> I sip lips,
> the taste of coffee lingers,
> smooth, hot, deeply satisfying.
> Now I'm addicted to the tingle
> of you on my tongue,
> the way you slid down my throat,
> percolate and burn my belly,
> warm all the way to toes.
>
> I inhale the aroma,
> your scent as familiar
> as the new day,
> as welcome as fresh baked bread,
> and summer sunshine,
>
> soft and delicious as home.
>
> BBO
> 7/3/03
>
>
>
>
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