DUSK RAGA
Just as the lonely, wicked, wild and glad
eyes know and do not know by letting drop
in every detail of their daily dread
the flowering and rainfall and mishap
of birth, there's a benignness comes about
the streets. Well-lined eyelashes flutter by
like Kali's black bewildering butterfly
--Philip N
Philip a good work, good end. The start seems a bit too heavy in modifiers
to me as in the first line. Some work though such as slow and fast warm
intersection.
Thanks.
Gary
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