> A babe will be born, wrapped in the shawl of time,
Nice poem.
> dazzled by each grassy blade's silvered metamorphosis
A bit too twisty and stretched.
> I thought I saw him once, not too long ago,
Here it is necessary to be bold and affirmative:
== I saw him once, not too long ago,
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c s shah
A general question:
What is the use of such artificial breaks - here three line breaks?
I in fact feel they distract the flow of the poem.
I thought I saw him once, not too long ago,
sitting beside the sea girt stones
at Skara Brae,
night daisies round his head.
Still telling the old tales,
still singing.
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