Hi Frank,
When I first read it I had to guess that this was on of the series you're
working on. If I didn't recognise that it was one of them I think I'd be
stumped! Once I know what it is, and where it will find a place, I realise I
will probably have read a previous one that adopts the same position in
relation to it's subject. (Does that mean the title needs more information
to help me see where I'm reading it from? I don't know... I guess only
seeing a fair few of them may help me see each individual one completely.)
With the poem ending with a question, and if another poem is seen to follow
it, the reader might be prompted to expect an answer to appear either next
or fairly soon. Or the reader might just do what I initially did and let the
huge open space at the end of the poem be enough.
What I've read here, though, intrigues me! It doesn't say too much, it maybe
just says enough. I get the feeling the person is being very careful to
control what they're saying... And is avoiding saying more by turning things
round, by ending things in asking a question.
I'm in two minds about the title. At times it seems to glare at me. It
sometimes seems to be slotted on top of the poem by the poet more than
emerging from the poem. But then, at other times, it seems the sort of title
the persona of the poem would like...
Ah, questions, questions! Not all that helpful, am I?
Bob
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: sub - power source
>Date: Thu, 31 Jul 2003 15:41:46 +1000
>
>
>power source (crimson)
>
>an image taken
>a photograph
>a drawing
>is a claim placed
>over the soul
>
>that's what I believe
>
>every portrait I've ever done
>is the marker
>of something owed to me
>a bequest
>
>and when I wrap the face
>in plaster
>shape my mould
>to capture curves and structure
>creases and pores
>eye-lashes
>
>how much more powerful
>is that
>
>~
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