Hi Frank,
I found this quite a powerful poem marred only by the last short line. Maybe
"that is", though not much better. I'd like to see a stronger ending for
this. Also, I don't think you needed the red to emphasise.
bw
James
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: sub - power source
>Date: Thu, 31 Jul 2003 15:41:46 +1000
>
>
>power source (crimson)
>
>an image taken
>a photograph
>a drawing
>is a claim placed
>over the soul
>
>that's what I believe
>
>every portrait I've ever done
>is the marker
>of something owed to me
>a bequest
>
>and when I wrap the face
>in plaster
>shape my mould
>to capture curves and structure
>creases and pores
>eye-lashes
>
>how much more powerful
>is that
>
>~
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