Shah, John, Christina, Bob
Thanks for your comments. The poem is not attempting to recreate an
experience (which may never have existed) but to embody an idea.. It's
deliberately short on illustration, the sound of a slammed door the kicked
shin and so on. Nothing so sophisticated. Instead the reader has an
opportunity to test the content against their own experience. Is it ever the
case that we can anticipate the actions of another person through a better
knowledge of our own nature, or is this rubbish? The reader can decide.
The ideas in it (not mine) have already crossed disciplines more than once.
Why not poetry? I suppose it's ironic that in this poem they should be found
too long when they are already a summary of a summary of fairly beefy texts
in which people argued in favour of those ideas. If in poetry how could the
same ideas be presented? I don't know. This is just one clumsy attempt.
However probably not in a short, heavily illustrated, understated poem. That
might produce a poem that was popular in contemporary terms, but at what
cost?
Has the feedback been helpful? Would I like more of it? A resounding yes on
both counts. Other wise why post? One of the things that come across is that
people seem at ease with a more empirical format, some bread to help the jam
go down. So that could be a challenge for me for the future, perhaps, to
manage these ideas in a more empirical setting.
In the meantime my next sub about a door is on a similar theme. See what
you think. No worries if you don't get along with it.
Colin
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