What does wip stand for?

I really liked this poem. Not much to fault here: crisp and intense. Suggest
"even of these to testify to what life seemed (not of) - sounds better IMO.
Suggest removal of breath of wind. It's the weaker of the two wind refs. The
real trick is that the poem is compatible with spiritual and non-spiritual
interpretations. Some might think that's a bad thing because of needing to
nail your colours to the mast and all that, but I would say that in this
poem you capture the essence of the experience before it differentiates into
the artificially alien worlds of spiritual and non-spiritual. I refer to the
end of the poem.

I've written plenty of elemental poems like this my self or have tried to
and here I would hint at a warning. It's among the least challenging types
of poems to write. Probably there are quite a few with the same sentiment
and similar images in drawers all over the world even if not quite as good.
Never put me off tho'.


Colin





----- Original Message -----
From: "Sue Scalf" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, July 28, 2003 5:00 PM
Subject: An Unknown Poet (wip)


> An Unknown Poet
>
> Under this stone
> there is no evidence
> of chaos chained.
> Centuries will take
> the bones.
> And of those words
> that saw clearer than eyes
> and tried to keep
> a fingerprint of life
> there may be no memory
> even of these to testify
> of what life seemed
> and what it meant.
> Words die
> as does flesh, and yet
> beyond the days
> chiseled here
> there remains
> something . . .
> breath of wind,
> swaying limbs
> trees in wind,
> grass, the touch
> of hands as lovers stand
> looking down.
>
>
> Sue Scalf
>