Thanks for your comments Mary, this draft is now consigned to the bin and
another on the way to bring out the more positive aspect of the piece you
like.
bw
James
>From: Mary L Evans <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Tracks IN The Sand
>Date: Tue, 15 Jul 2003 11:42:30 +0100
>
>I am inclined to agree with what has been already said in others comment of
>this poem, James. The poem itself is clear and you paint an interesting
>scene, I can almost picture it - as I live quite close to the estuary of
>the River Wyre on the Fylde Coast.
>
>There are a couple of typos in the poem, not much you can do about that
>here, but if you have not spotted them in your original piece then they
>need to be attended to.
>
> >>>I can see that the river (befor) me - before
>
> >>>(liike) these tracks, with the next tide. - like
>
>Nice work I enjoyed the read.
>
>Thanks
>
>Mary
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