Dear Gary,
Many thanks for your comments, I'll have another look at the line-breaks,
though I'm not not sure about 'clipping' the verb in the last line - just
doesn't sound right in a riddle form to me.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
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From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, July 16, 2003 6:10 PM
Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] New sub: Riddle
Grassy, here
When I was a dog, I ate warm grass
from the bellies of my prey,
felt packed muscles under pelt.
I ogled the moon and howled.
Her face gave me my clue.
I would cap Moon. I haven't decided if I want more form or less, I think
though more so the construct
When I was a dog, I ate
warm grass from the bellies
of my prey, felt packed muscles
under pelt. I ogled the Moon
and howled, Her face my clue.
esp the first line ending on the verb.
Smiles and thanks.
Gary
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